A Little Taster

Dany

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right, as you the readers, i want your comments on the layout and whatcould be done to improve.
UNFORTUNATLY i h ave run out of inc to print more of and scan them in etc so these two will have to do.
the above is a introduction to the family of polypteridae before care sheets of indvidual species..
the below is a care sheet for a dragon goby. (totaly random samples)
adobebichirjpg.jpg

dragongoby.jpg



oh by the way. the pictures are a little pale because i forgot t set the printer settings to PHOTO GLOSSY papaer before printing.
the photos were contributed by Andrew bryan (senegal)
and Scott Graham (dragon gobies)



let me know what you think..
Dan
 
the dragon goby looks good, but the top sheet needs paragraphing abit more :good:
 
Hey Dany thats looking really good, I dont want to sound negative but there are a few spelling mistakes in it, have you got a spell check :rolleyes:
 
I don't know who your target audience is but I always appreciate when a book or website contains both °F/°C as well as inches/centimeters when describing temperature range and size. Also, I'm assuming you are giving credit in the book to the people who submitted the images you are using?

Don't be discouraged by all of the "constructive criticism" you may receive. It will only help. :book:

By the way, did you know you have two similar postings?
 
The Second page was easier to read, probably because of the layout. Hit with all that text on the first page, :crazy: Where do i start !
 
Its got potential, but as said, check the spelling, when I saw ink in your post before the pages spelt as inc, it kind of made me wonder what else I would see spelling wise.
Apart from that, looks good to me :)
 
Wow, that's really long, boring-looking text! :eek: Maybe shorten it and keep information that would be beneficial to readers who are probably just average hobbyists. Make the text bigger, too. I'm sure most people would skip over all that genus stuff at the beginning and just look for stuff they need to know, like that paragraph on how they are nocturnal predators and can breathe air. :) I'd probably move the picture of the bichir up into the middle of the page on the side to catch people's eye. If you have one picture at the bottom, they might not read it. I know I love looking at pictures when I'm flipping through books, and rarely read the pages without pictures. Hope this helps!
 
depends who the book is aimed at weather you want stuff about the genus etc in and how much you should fiddle with the layout.

who's your target audience?
 
boring and long? no. I liked it a lote. They're right, the second one looks more like a pro did it.

Also, why does the goby have care and tank size, but the senegal/ropefish does not?
 
Layout, spelling and grammar could do with tweaking if this is submitted for publication.

On the plus side I've learnt something about fish today.
 
Good start if the above points are taken into consideration..

Where are you getting the information from?

Squid
 
I agree with every one else. The second text was much easier to read. I skipped bits of the first text cos there is so much of it together so I think the layout is important to keep the reader interested. If you can keep the text 'broken' with pics I think its very good! :good:
 
nothing like a bit of construction critizism.
i know that my spelling is utterly terrible. Thank god for spell check!
i will slightly modify the layout.
describing temperature range and size. Also, I'm assuming you are giving credit in the book to the people who submitted the images you are using?
yes all photoshave their name printed on the back pages somewhere.
i was editing the first one today as even after i wrote it, i got confused when i read back over it. VERY CONFUSED
the book is aimed for all fishkeepers, begginers and advanced. i will need to slighly modify my text bit.
Where are you getting the information from?
all information if my own from a years of fishkeeping and research. i had to double check on the net for the scientific name for the gobies and he tamperature range though... :shout: i also work in maidenhead..!
thanks for your comments guys..
dan
 
Pretty good, once the spelling and grammar is sorted it will be tonnes better though :p Perhaps, however, it might be a good idea to put the profile before the detailed info, that way you don't have to look through the detailed stuff if you only want to know size. I don't see anything wrong with the large amount of text, after all, it doesn't seem to be the sort of book you sit down and read cover to cover, more a reference book. Orante bichirs, however, can hardly be considered small, even for bichirs ;)
 
considering some grow over a metre, ornates are small.

or SMALLER would be a more approprate term..?
Dan :shout:
 

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